Writing Project B

Good morning miss. :)

I will revise my work about describing people.

Bob Sadino

Bob "Sadino" was born in Lampung, on March 9th, 1933. His full named was Bambang Mustari Sadino,  usually  called “Om Bob”.  He was the owner of the Kemchick and Kemfood business.  He was often seen using a short- sleeved shirt and short that became his trademark.

Bob "Sadino" was born from affluent family. When his parents "were"  died, he received all legacy.  Bob "Sadino" went to Netherlands and he worked at  Djakarta Lylod in Amsterdam.  He also lived in Holland and met "his"  life partner, Soelami Soejoed. They  had two "childrens", Mira Andiani and  Shanti Dwi Ratih.

Bob "Sadino" and family returned "to"  Indonesia in 1967. He lived in Kemang, South Jakarta. He decided to quit from his job at Djakarta Lylod in Amsterdam. First job, he rented a car Mercedes that he had. He drove by himself. But "unfortunately", he got an accident so this job was stoped. Bob "Sadino" also ever worked as  construction laborers. During this period, Bob Badino tried to cultivate chickens and sold the eggs of chickens. With started from sold some Kg of eggs per day. Several years his effort had progressed.

All have been proven by Bob, owner and founder of Kemchick and Kemfood business. “Entrepreneur”  succes that was began from below and not from entrepreanur  “family”.

- sadino --> Sadino
- When his parents "was"  died, he received all legacy.
   Revised :  When his parents "were"  died, he received all legacy.

-  "... family returned Indonesia in 1967."

     Revised : "... family returned "to"  Indonesia in 1967."
-  He also lived in Holland and met  life partner, Soelami Soejoed.
   Revised : He also lived in Holland and met "his"  life partner, Soelami Soejoed.
-  They had two childrens, ...
   Revised : They had two "children", ... 
-  But unfortunetely, ...
   Revised : But "unfortunately", ...
-  Entrepreaneur --> "Entrepreneur"
-  familily -->  "family"

Thanks for all of you. :)