Minggu, 26 April 2015
This is some corrections from my friends
about my post work#4
1) Eka Herli P.W :
“Hi.. Irfan, I will give you some
comments.
- He moved university to improve his knowledge about system information, he studied at Seattle University in America, major "multimedia" & "web design" and Master of Computer Science.
should, - He moved university to improve his knowledge about system information, he studied at Seattle University in America, major "of" "Multimedia" & "Web Design" and Master of Computer Science.”
- He moved university to improve his knowledge about system information, he studied at Seattle University in America, major "multimedia" & "web design" and Master of Computer Science.
should, - He moved university to improve his knowledge about system information, he studied at Seattle University in America, major "of" "Multimedia" & "Web Design" and Master of Computer Science.”
*)Irfan Dwiyanto : “its right correction
and I agree with you.i will more thorough in my post.”
2) Dyah Damayanti :
Hi Irfan, I think that this sentence :
"...,his continued in Gandhi National Senior High School Ancol
Jakarta." is wrong, you can take my suggestion if you want. And my
suggestion is "After that, he continued his study in Gandhi National Senior
High School Ancol Jakarta."
*)Irfan Dwiyanto : “ok Dyah,I will take
your suggestion,its adventage for me.”
Thanks for my friends especially for Eka
Herli and Dyah Damayanti :v
