Jumat, 24 April 2015
Mr. Heppy Trenggono is a successful businessman, he is a
Founder and CEO of United Balimuda Group. It is a multinational
group of business that walk on plantation and consumer good. When he was studying
in university, he was became a freelance. Heppy also has worked in some big companies up to got a top position as a
director in A. latief Corporation ( now is TvOne). Previously , Balimuda that walk on land clearing sector for
oil-palm that was a sideline job when Heppy became a technique director of Lativi.
But, when Heppy had taken a choice to
made his business growing up, so he got
out from Lativi. The kind of his business on land clearing used many heavy
equipment, but he had had an experience in United Tractor, it is a company that
walk on selling heavy equipment. This Land clearing was beginning when he became
a subcontractor from Malaysian company. And then, he took a gudang garam project
that would have been made a land clearing on east Borneo. This business growing
up fastly and need a big fund. Happy
choose to take a loan and whirl this money from many creditors. Heppy soundly
asleep with this loan and not able to control his self. His expansion was
affluent with increased the using of heavy equipment, so he can’t to pay
his debt.
And then Heppy became
a broker for company that would entered
to oil palm business. Slowly Heppy can Paid his debt and bought oil-palm land.
His business activity was bought some land. And then, he managed the land through his branch company. After that, the land sold on specific age. His profit came from the difference of that sale
price. Heppy also entered other business. One of his consumer product is instant
porridge that the material is potato with name Potayo that managed by
Heppyfoods Food and Industri Pangan Indonesia Tbk that builted in 2006 with "end
user" marketing strategy and manufacturing health coffee with Cordova as the brand
name.
Now, under United Balimuda Corp there are 12 company and
has employee more than 3000 person with kindship system. He want to built employee
character with “inspiring and giving the world” as his principle that was given
to his employee.
Heppy also builted Islamic Bussiness Forum community with
entrepreneur and entrepreneur candidate as the member, also builted Beli Indonesia 0n February 27th
2011 with 504 entrepreneur from 42 town in Indonesia. Morality value that he was instruct is tradition to separate out 10 percent of his income for deed activity.
Hi Dian, I think that your sentence :
BalasHapus1. "When he was studying in university he was became a freelance." should be "When he was studying in university, he became a freelance."
2. "And then Heppy became a broker for company that would entered to oil palm business.", should be "And then, Heppy became a broker for company that would entered to oil palm business."
3. "Heppy also builted Islamic Bussiness Forum community with entrepreneur...", should be "Heppy also built Islamic Bussiness Forum community with entrepreneur"
Well, please give some feedbacks for my post on work #4 :)
ok maya, thanks for your feedback. there is many mistake I do, except from you. Last morning I corrected with asri..waiting for my feedback, ok..
HapusHello Dian, let me give feedback for your assignment.
BalasHapus1. Heppy also had worked (has worked) in some big companies up to got a top position as a director. I think you must use a present perfect tense.
2. A. latief (Latief) Corporation ( now is TvOne). (If it is the name of a company, you must use a capital letter).
3. Previously , Balimuda that walk on land.. (You must pay attention the use of (comma). The comma must be put after the word previously without space).
4. he took a gudang garam. (The words of gudang garam must be written as "Gudang Garam", because it is a name of a company).
5. east Borneo. You must use a capital letter, because it is a name of province "East Borneo".
6. Heppy soundly asleep with this loan and not able to control his self (himself). Because it is a possessive pronoun from he.
7. Heppy can Paid (paid) his debt and bought oil-palm land. You mus not use a capital letter for the word "paid".
8. His business activity was bought some land. I don't know what you have mean?
9. Industri Pangan Indonesia Tbk that builted (built). The past word is built.
10. He want to built (build). You must use present verb after the word "to".
11. and entrepreneur candidat (candidate).
Thank you
hello asri, thanks for your feedback. Like our discussion last morning that I want to say that the activity of this company is trading some land, I'm sorry about my sentence that make you confuse
Hapus