Jumat, 24 April 2015
Good Afternoon :)
I will tell you about Bob Sadino.
Bob Sadino
Bob sadino was born in Lampung, on March 9th, 1933. His full named was
Bambang Mustari Sadino, usually called “Om Bob”. He was the owner of the Kemchick and Kemfood business. He was often seen using a short- sleeved shirt
and short that became his trademark.
Bob sadino was born from affluent
family. When his parents was died, he
received all legacy. Bob sadino went to
Netherlands and he worked at Djakarta
Lylod in Amsterdam. He also lived in
Holland and met life partner, Soelami
Soejoed. They had two childrens, Mira Andiani and
Shanti Dwi Ratih.
Bob sadino
and family returned Indonesia in 1967.
He lived in Kemang, South Jakarta. He
decided to quit from his job at Djakarta Lylod in Amsterdam. First job, he rented a car Mercedes that he had. He drove by himself. But unfortunetely, he got an accident so this
job was stoped. Bob sadino also ever
worked as construction laborers. During this
period, bob sadino tried to cultivate chickens and sold the eggs of chickens.
With started from sold some Kg of eggs per day. Several years his effort had
progressed.
All have been proven by Bob, owner
and founder of Kemchick and Kemfood business. Entrepreanur succes that was began
from below and not from entrepreanur
famlily.
Please give your suggestions to my posting and I will be glad to respond all of your feedbacks.
Thank you :)
I'm sorry,I give you a little feedback.
BalasHapusBob sadino and family returned Indonesia in 1967.Maybe better sentence is Bob sadino and family returned "to"Indonesia in 1967.
thank you :v
Thank you for your feedback,
HapusBob Sadino and family returned "to" Indonesia in 1967.
Ok. I'm agree about it.
:)
Hi Eka, I will give you feedback.
BalasHapus1. "Bob sadino" should use capital letter "Bob Sadino" because this is a name of person.
2. And there are some wrong words. That is entrepreanur-->entrepreneur, famlily-->family.
Thank you..:)
Thank you Ukhti for your feedback,
Hapus1. "Bob sadino" should use capital letter "Bob Sadino" because this is a name of person.
Ok. I'm agree for it.
2. Entrepreanur -> Entrepreneur and familily -> family
Ok. I slipshod.
Thank you :)
Hi Eka..I want to give some comments for you :)
BalasHapus1. I think that your sentence "When his parents was died, he received all legacy." , should be "When his parents were died, he received all legacy."
2. "He also lived in Holland and met life partner, Soelami Soejoed.", should be "He also lived in Holland and met his life partner, Soelami Soejoed."
3. "They had two childrens, Mira Andiani and Shanti Dwi Ratih.", should be "They had two children, Mira Andiani and Shanti Dwi Ratih."
4. "unfortunetely" , should be "unfortunately"
I'm sorry Eka if I have some mistakes in my correction :)
Thank you maya for your comments. :)
Hapus1. I think that your sentence "When his parents was died, he received all legacy." , should be "When his parents were died, he received all legacy."
Ok. I'm agree, because "parents" is plural so should use "were".
2. "He also lived in Holland and met life partner, Soelami Soejoed.", should be "He also lived in Holland and met his life partner, Soelami Soejoed."
Ok. I slipshod.
3. "They had two childrens, Mira Andiani and Shanti Dwi Ratih.", should be "They had two children, Mira Andiani and Shanti Dwi Ratih."
Ok. You are right.
4. "unfortunetely" , should be "unfortunately"
Ok.
Thank you maya. :)
Eka, I will give you feedback, you should probably remove the space in your work form " He was often seen using a short"-" sleeved shirt".
BalasHapusThanks :-)