Minggu, 26 April 2015
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Do
you know a creator of Microsoft ? Yes, he is Bill Gates. Then, I am very
interested to describe about him. Bill Gates is known as a successful
businessman in the world, so that is OK, isn’t? Before that, I would like to
tell about his personal information.
William
Henry “ Bill “ Gates and we know as Bill Gates was born on October, 28th
1955 in Seattle, Washington
and now he is sixty years old. His parents is William H. Gates and
Mary Maxwell Gates. Gates married with Melinda
French in January 1st 1994 and they have had three child. They are Jennifer Katharine Gates, Rory John
Gates, and Phoebe Adele Gates. Bill Gates was
a smart child, but he often has problem in school activity. When he was eleven
years old, his parent made a decision to make change for himself so Bill Gates
had to move in Lakeside School, is a prestigious elementary
school that specifically for man. In 1968, Bill Gates was acquainted with
computer for the first time.
Then, what do you want to know about the
history of education. In here, I would like to give some information about it.
Gates graduated
from Lakeside School in 1973. After that, he has participated in SAT test and
gets 1,590 from 1,600, wow it’s the best score. With this score, he can be
accepted in Harvard College where he meets with Steve Ballmer. Gates don’t has
a plan of study when he studies in Harvard College but he uses his time for
study about computer
I want to tell about his career as
successful businessman. Do you know that he become the richest businessman in the
world? And you have to know about his career. Let’s see.
Mr.
Bill Gates is a programmer, businessman, investor and as the chief of
Microsoft. He has been a richest businessman in the world since 1995 until 2009
but he becomes the third rank in 2008. He can well-versed BASIC quickly, is a
manner of computer program. He writes some program, and learns more about
computer. He is given epithet by his teacher, “He is eccentric”. He is a
student of Harvard University in Cambridge. In there, he meets Paul Allen. Together
with Paul Allen, Bill Gates envolves his talent in computer program. However,
Bill Gates makes a decision to rendered his time to Microsoft.
By means of effort, a
company that is built that so called Microsoft Corporation becomes successful
and Bill Gates as a millionaire. In 1990, Bill Gates has succeed to make
operation system that is very good in world market. However, Bill Gates ever
gets a bad reputation in his career. Not only one, but Bill Gates does some
faults in software business. In 1990, Bill Gates gets a claim from Judicature Ministry
of America United because he has done monopoly with small companies. During his
career in Microsoft, Gates ever becomes CEO and still be the biggest of stockholder
with more eight percent from general stock and he also has written some books.
Gates included the one of revolution computer businessman that is known in the
world. In the end of his career, Bill Gates does some philanthropy work for
Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation that is built in 2000.
Gates has many
appreciations so I want to tell it for you. Let’s see!
In 1987, Gates becomes
a billioner in the fourth hundred pages as the Richest People in Forbes
magazine.
In 1994, he gets appreciation
as Distinguished Fellow in British
Computer Society
In 2006, he has the
eight rank in “Heroes of Our Time” list and gets a epithet as CEO in Chief Executive Officers
In October 2009, Gates
is announced that gets appreciation 2010 Bower Award for Business Leadership
from The Franklin Institute for his achievement in philanthropy activity.
Maybe,
it’s enough for me. And I hope you can give some feed back to correct my
exercise. See you and thank you J
Hi Meyliani, after I read your post I found some errors, such as:
BalasHapus1. so that is OK, isn’t? I think that's sentence should be "so that is ok, isn't it?"
2. a ephited should be "an ephited"
3. is built in 2000 should be " was built in 2000."sorry friend :)
I think like that, if I made any mistake or you disagree you can refuse my comment :)
Hi Mey, I agree with Asmara :)
BalasHapusAnd I also want to give some comments for you :
1. "His parents is William H. Gates and Mary Maxwell Gates."
Correction : "His parents are William H. Gates and Mary Maxwell Gates."
2. "and they have had three child."
Correction : "and they have had three children."
3. ".., is a prestigious elementary school that specifically for man."
Correction : ".., it is a prestigious elementary school that especially for man."
4. "Then, what do you want to know about the history of education."
Correction : "Then, what do you want to know about his history of education?" (not full stop)
5. "Gates don’t has a plan of study when he studies in Harvard College but he uses his time for study about computer"
Correction : "Gates didn't have a plan when he was studying in Harvard College but he used his time for study about computer"
I'm sorry if I have some mistakes in my correction :)
thanks for Asmara and Maya that have given me comment on my work.
BalasHapusFor Maya in your comment, "his parents are William H. Gates........................."
I want to mean it like this, "his parent is..........."