Writing Project B

Hallo, Miss Uut.. Sorry for the late post, I'm here to give a try, to suggest some better answers to the grammatical errors my friends did yesterday, hope the sentences were correct. Check it out! ^^

Group 7
F: I bought a new book on the market yesterday.
T: I bought a new book at the market yesterday.

F: Yuli was watching television when I cleaned the floor.
T: Yuli was watching television when I  was cleaning the floor.

F: Last month I was dancing with my girlfriend when my brotherS came.
T: Last month I was dancing with my girlfriend when my brothers came.

F: I had played football after I exercised.
T: I exercised after i had played football.

Group 9
F: I bought many clothes to my family.
T: I bought many clothes for my family.

F: The rain was pouring heavy when I arrived at home this morning.
T: The rain was pouring heavily when I arrived at home this morning.

F: Listen! The headmaster is announcing about the independence day.
T: Listen! The headmaster is announcing about the Independence Day.

F: Fauzy had sent me a email before he called (no subject) yesterday.
T: Fauzy had sent me an email before he called (me) yesterday.

F: I known you after I had met with your family.
T: I knew you after I had met with your family.

Group 10
F: We are starting (missing: to) promote this product tommorow morning in the Sun Hotel...
T: We are starting to promote this product tomorrow morning at the Sun Hotel...

F: Wait a minutes! She is writing a letter for our director.
T: Wait a minute! She is writing a letter for our director.

F: This annual report is not complete, please check your notes and say to me as soon as possible. I'm really need this document.
T: This annual report is not complete, please check your notes and say to me as soon as possible. I really need this document.

F: Networking is very important for our organization, so we have to have many relation with other company.
T: Networking is very important for our organization, so we have to have many relations with other company.

F: This product was expired, you have to saw the labels before you bought it.
T: This product is expired, you have to see the label before you bought it.

F: I delivered some order of fresh chickens to the Ayu's restaurant last morning. (last morning kinda awkward to me.. ahaha)
T: I delivered some orders of fresh chickens to Ayu's restaurant yesterday morning.

F: His presentation was very excellent for (missing: a) young entrepreneur like him.
T: His presentation was very excellent for a young entrepreneur like him.

F: I had finished wrap up this candy two hours ago, so you can bring it to the warehouse.
T: I had wrapped up this candy two hours ago, so you can bring it to the warehouse.

F: Novi had written her job to makes some business plan, she must bring it to the director tommorow morning as soon as possible.
T: Novi had written her job to make some business plan, she must bring it to the director tomorrow morning as soon as possible.

F: The man had gone from that company last year and now his sister apply for the same job with his position.
T: The man had gone from that company last year and now his sister applies for the same job as his position.

Correct me if I wrong, thank you! ^^